100 word challenge week #8
I was
swimming in my backyard pool and thinking to myself, tomorrow I’m gonna dress
up as a white spooky ghost. I got out of the water and started to make my costume,
when I finally finished I went out to get some candy for the trick-or-treaters.
I got out of the car and saw a little flame on my porch. I ran over too try and
put the fire out with my foot. Then I realized I had just been pranked. My
costume was burned but it looked totally awesome. That’s how I celebrated Halloween!
Hello Diskplayer,
ReplyDeleteYour writing would improve with more descriptive vocabulary e.g. '___ water', '___ costume', and ___ candy. Avoid slang words like 'gonna'. Congratulations on completing the 100 Word Challenge Week #8.
Sincerely,
Mrs. Van